| Author | Message | ||
| Christopher T George
Senior Member Username: chrisgeorge Post Number: 2551 Registered: 12-2004 |
The Hike to Langdale Pikes We trudged because we were ordered to hike from Old Dungeon Ghyll to Langdale Pikes, commanded by our master "Dead Eye" Deadman to rendezvous at Thorn Crag by the set of sun. We began around dawn: deposited from chara, Boff and I clambered up by stream and corrie. We ascended as if above us lay some holy grail; to not reach it -- we were to afraid to fail. Yet, soon, weariness claimed us, rest beckoned, we had hiked more than far enough, we reckoned. As noon approached, we sighted below us a pub, drank Tizer, ate bangers and mash, hearty grub. In the smoky snug, local geezers eyed us lads, mumbled, hunched together, thought us sad perhaps or just plain stupid, hard to say. We hiked on, added to our blisters that day. Christopher T. George Langdale Pikes Editor, Desert Moon Review http://www.desertmoonreview.com/ Co-Editor, Loch Raven Review http://www.lochravenreview.com/ http://chrisgeorge.netpublish.net/ | ||
| Gary Blankenship
Senior Member Username: garyb Post Number: 5087 Registered: 07-2001 |
Chris, good to see you rhyme, vg read. Thanks. Gary The Eye of the Coming Storm http://www.mindfirerenew.com/ | ||
| Christopher T George
Senior Member Username: chrisgeorge Post Number: 2552 Registered: 12-2004 |
Thank you, Gary. Glad you enjoyed this piece.  Chris Editor, Desert Moon Review http://www.desertmoonreview.com/ Co-Editor, Loch Raven Review http://www.lochravenreview.com/ http://chrisgeorge.netpublish.net/ | ||
| Morgan Lafay
Intermediate Member Username: morganlafay Post Number: 443 Registered: 08-2005 |
"Dead Eye Deadman"...I can just invision a glazed discolored eye, as scary as his name...I would have kept trudging too! I know corrie is a hillside hollow, and I know bangers are sausages, but... What type of drink is Tizer (an ale)? What is mash (potatoes; porridge?) I must know! Please... Enjoyed very much. Have a safe trip and much fun! Work equation: 30% work; 70% fun!  (Message edited by morganlafay on October 05, 2005) | ||
| Emusing
Moderator Username: emusing Post Number: 1917 Registered: 08-2003 |
Chris I found a spectacular site for vistas of the place you mention. Breathtaking. http://www.odg.co.uk/gallery/guests.cfm?sectid=0500 and this too. http://www.lakelandscape.co.uk/gallery.htm I can imagine this piece read in the appropriate dialect. A very enjoyable read. E | ||
| M
Board Administrator Username: mjm Post Number: 5411 Registered: 11-1998 |
Nice work with rhyme and meter in this one, Chris. A good story as well! The only line I might monkey with is that last one: "We hiked on, added to our blisters that day." I might rephrase a bit more poetically: "We hiked on, added blisters to that day." Of course, it's not really the day that has added blisters, but it's kickier to say it that way and I'm sure readers would understand. | ||
| Christopher T George
Senior Member Username: chrisgeorge Post Number: 2555 Registered: 12-2004 |
Thanks, Morgan, E and M! Glad you all enjoyed this one. M, thanks for the smoother more poetic finishing line. I have been encouraged elsewhere to extend the poem into more of a rite-of-passage - a la "Stand By Me" - so stay tuned. E, I appreciate the nice links for those spectacular views. Great, thanks! Morgan, Tizer is a non-alcoholic soft drink, while mash is mashed potatoes. And you are spot on about corrie and bangers. Thanks for the best wishes for my trip, Morgan. Chris Editor, Desert Moon Review http://www.desertmoonreview.com/ Co-Editor, Loch Raven Review http://www.lochravenreview.com/ http://chrisgeorge.netpublish.net/ | ||
| LJ Cohen
Moderator Username: ljc Post Number: 3055 Registered: 07-2002 |
Chris, I really felt as if I had taken the journey with you. Enjoyed. best, ljc http://ljcbluemuse.blogspot.com/ | ||
| Deborah P Kolodji
Member Username: dkolodji Post Number: 62 Registered: 04-2005 |
I love hiking and felt like I was with you. I enjoyed the rhythmn and rhyme. Deborah P Kolodji http://www.livejournal.com/~dkolodji http://www.kolodji.com Editor, Amaze: The Cinquain Journal http://www.amaze-cinquain.com | ||
| Kathy Paupore
Senior Member Username: kathy Post Number: 2599 Registered: 12-2003 |
Chris, enjoyable read. I didn't notice the rhyme, which is a compliment. I was too busy soaking in the unique word choices and hiking with colorful characters. K |
